English "300" original and revised

ORIGINAL VERSION:
“300” isn’t just a silly action flick, it has a powerful message for today. Considering how it represents american values. It should be no suprise why it was such a big hit. The American values “300” espouses include the following; freedom, independence, and family. The movie reflects the values of freedom and independence because the spartans don’t want to be enslave by the persians. Causing them to lose their right too do what they want. Family because they fight so their wives and children won’t be enslave. Everyone loves their family. Which makes this part of the movie easy to relate to. If you doesn’t believe “300” represents american values, then just look, at how much family meens to americans and remember what Thomas Jefferson says in the Declaration of Independence, “[men] are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty, and the pursuit of Happiness” (518). However, its true that “300” reflects the values of freedom the Founding Fathers has.

REVISED VERSION:
“300” isn’t just a silly action flick; it has a powerful message for today. Considering how it represents America’s values, it should be no surprise why it was such a big hit. The American values “300” espouses include the following; freedom, independence, and family. The movie reflects the values of freedom and independence because the Spartans don’t want to be enslaved by the Persians because this would cause them to lose their right too do what they want. “300” represents family because the men fight so their wives and children won’t be enslaved. Everyone loves their family, which makes this part of the movie easy to relate to. If you don’t believe “300” represents the American values, then just look at how much family means to Americans, and remember what Thomas Jefferson said in the Declaration of Independence, “[men] are endowed by their Creator with certain unalienable Rights, that among these are Life, Liberty, and the pursuit of Happiness” (518). However, it is true that “300” reflects the values of freedom the Founding Fathers have.